Sunday, June 30, 2013

5 Sentence Fiction- VIEW


 Kera stood at the end of the bar looking out over the sea of nodding heads keeping time to the Latin rhythms of her favorite band, while her sometimes-friend, Jamie, slurred out her life story to the poor, unsuspecting guy who had the misfortune of sitting in the wrong place at the wrong time.
  She downed the last swallow of her warm beer and pulled a twenty out of her jeans pocket to buy another round when the sound of familiar laughter made her stop and smile; She didn't know how Jay managed to get out of work early or how he figured out where to find her, but it was just like him to surprise her like this.
 She quickly ordered another beer for herself and a tall Jack and Coke with lots of lime, just the way he liked it.  I may have a few surprises for you tonight, she thought as she pushed her way through the packed bar  in search of her fiance'.

  When he finally stepped back from the tall brunette he'd been kissing,  Jay noticed some broken glass on the floor and waved over to the bartender to come clean it up before somebody got hurt.

8 comments:

  1. Superbly rendered, such is life... ;-)
    http://ofglassandpaper.com/2013/07/01/fivesentencefiction-view/

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  3. Well done. I felt like I witnessed it.

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    1. Thank you, Ann. That's a great compliment.

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    2. Thank you, Ann. That's a great compliment.

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